美本申請時如何寫自我介紹

美本申請時如何寫自我介紹。早在8月1號已經(jīng)開啟的通用申請，標(biāo)志著2019-2020申請季已正式開始。畢業(yè)班的同學(xué)這時候各種成績 （GPA， SAT/ACT， SAT2， 托福） 和活動基本上已經(jīng)成型， 現(xiàn)在我們的關(guān)注點(diǎn)應(yīng)該放到了申請文書上面。

申請文書是什么？

通用申請（common app）里有7個命題， 學(xué)生可以任選一個， 其中6個命題題很廣， 比如你的家庭背景， 你遇到過的困難， 受到過什么挑戰(zhàn)，解決過的問題， 描述你的一個成就／事件， 最后一個讓學(xué)生自己選題， 所有可以說選題范圍是很廣的。回答common app問題的這篇作文我們稱主文書， 也叫自我介紹， 除此以外， 很多學(xué)校還有專對這個學(xué)校需要回答的問題， 叫補(bǔ)充文書。

今天我們先講講主文書的寫作：

洞察你的個性

這篇文書最重要的作用是讓招生委員會了解你的個性以及你對學(xué)校社區(qū)的作用。你好奇嗎？雄心勃勃的？關(guān)懷？這些品質(zhì)會對你的大學(xué)經(jīng)歷產(chǎn)生深遠(yuǎn)的影響，但很難根據(jù)高中成績單來確定。基本上，這篇文章將您的申請情景化，并顯示您在GPA和標(biāo)化成績外是怎樣的一個人。比如說有兩個學(xué)生，Jane和Tim：他們都有3.8 GPA和1400 SAT。Jane住在科羅拉多州，是她的田徑隊的隊長，而Tim住在佛蒙特州，經(jīng)常為學(xué)校報紙做貢獻(xiàn)，但他們都想成為醫(yī)生，他們都是當(dāng)?shù)蒯t(yī)院的志愿者。雖然Jane和Tim在紙面上看起來一樣，實(shí)際上他們是完全不同的，他們的獨(dú)特視角在他們的文章中得以體現(xiàn)。

Jane寫了一篇關(guān)于如何研究她的家庭歷史的學(xué)校項(xiàng)目，讓她意識到如何發(fā)現(xiàn)抗生素和疫苗等現(xiàn)代醫(yī)療方法改變了世界，并促使她開始從事醫(yī)學(xué)研究的職業(yè)生涯。而Tim講述了一位善良的醫(yī)生如何幫助他克服對針頭的恐懼，這種互動讓他想起了同情的價值，并激勵他成為一名家庭醫(yī)生。這兩個學(xué)生可能看起來外表相似，但他們的動機(jī)和個性卻截然不同。如果沒有一篇文章，你的申請將僅僅是一系列數(shù)字：GPA，SAT成績，準(zhǔn)備學(xué)術(shù)活動碗比賽的小時數(shù)等等。而一篇好的個人陳述， 可以讓招生官從個人層面上了解你，甚至可以建立情感上的聯(lián)系， 是你作為個人脫穎而出的機(jī)會。

“大學(xué)申請文書不是工作面試， 而更像是和招生官聊天“

主文書寫作時一個常見的誤區(qū)是羅列學(xué)生的個人成就 （這個現(xiàn)象在申請美高的同學(xué)中尤其參見），認(rèn)為把自己的高大上的那些活動描述一番一定能打動招生官。實(shí)際上， 這是非常不可取的。

首先這樣的文書不夠個人化， 其次通用申請專門有活動部分讓學(xué)生填寫活動， 文書里再寫一遍不但沒有用好文書做為一個很好的機(jī)會讓招生官了解自己，而且弄不好還會給人自我吹噓的感覺。當(dāng)然， 如果學(xué)生選擇某項(xiàng)活動， 描寫參加這項(xiàng)活動的心路過程那就另當(dāng)別論了。

文書的四個中心問題

所有優(yōu)秀的Common App主文書應(yīng)該回答的四個中心問題：“我是誰？”，“為什么我在這里？”，

“我的獨(dú)特之處是什么？”，

“對我來說重要的是什么？”

第三個問題比較難回答，它涉及到為什么你的人格特質(zhì)，思維方法，興趣領(lǐng)域和有形技能形成了獨(dú)特的組合。第四個問題是一個可以簡單回答的結(jié)論，通常在結(jié)論段落中。總的來說，沒有一個“正確”的話題。只要您對自己的想法感到舒適和熱情，并且它回答了四個中心的問題，您的論文就會很強(qiáng)大。寫作過程中記住 ”展示， 不要說“ （show， not tell），??你可以通過具體描述發(fā)生的事情或心理活動， 讓讀者得出結(jié)論， 而不是把結(jié)論告訴給讀者。

比如：“I struggled to make friends when I transferred schools,”??可以改寫為：“I scanned the bustling school cafeteria, feeling more and more forlorn with each unfamiliar face. I found an empty table and ate my lunch alone.” 后面這種具體描述的方式給人更印象深刻。

以下是主文書的一些范文 （范文是縮減版，來自網(wǎng)絡(luò)。 尊重隱私，達(dá)愛不公開學(xué)生文書）， 這些范文好在寫的是個人化的故事， 而且可以看到作者有反思， 有成長， 讀完以后， 讀者感覺更了解學(xué)生了。?

范文1

回答文書命題：有些學(xué)生的背景，身份，興趣或才能如此有意義，他們相信如果沒有它，他們的申請就會不完整。如果這聽起來像你，請分享你的故事。Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, please share your story.

這篇文書選擇描寫學(xué)生背景 - 一個人的背景包括經(jīng)驗(yàn)，培訓(xùn)，教育和文化。您可以討論成長經(jīng)歷，與家人互動，以及人際關(guān)系如何塑造自己。背景可以包括與藝術(shù)，音樂，科學(xué)，體育，寫作和許多其他學(xué)習(xí)技能的長期互動。背景還包括您的社交環(huán)境以及它們?nèi)绾斡绊懩母兄４送猓梢酝怀鲲@示多個背景之間的交叉點(diǎn)，并顯示每個背景的組成部分。

文章描寫了一個貧窮的越南移民家庭中成長的學(xué)生如何激勵她抓住重大機(jī)遇，即使他們有風(fēng)險或具有挑戰(zhàn)性。她描述了開辦和經(jīng)營家庭雜貨店的情感需求。

“An opportunity knocked on my parents’ door: a grocery store in the town of Dennis, Mississippi, was up for rent. My parents took the chance, risking all of their savings. On the first day, the business brought in only twenty dollars. Twenty dollars.

My mother and my father wept after they closed the shop. Seeing the business as a failure, my mom commenced her packing that night; returning to Vietnam seemed inevitable. The next business day, however, sales increased ten-fold. More and more customers came each successive day. My mom’s tears turned into—well, more tears, but they were tears of joy. My mother unpacked a bag each night. Fifteen years later, my parents now own Blue Ravine Grocery. My parents work, work, work to keep the shelves stocked and the customers coming. The grocery store holds a special place in my heart: it is the catalyst for my success. So when the opportunity to attend the Mississippi School for Mathematics and Science presented itself, I took it and ran, as did my parents by leaving Vietnam and by buying the store. Although the opportunities that my parents and I pursued are different, our journey is essentially the same: we walk a road paved with uncertainty and doubt with the prospect of success fortified by our hearts and our hands.”

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回答文書命題.：反思您對某個信仰或想法提出質(zhì)疑的時間。是什么促使你思考？結(jié)果是什么？Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome?

這個命題看似很難回答，因?yàn)榇蠖鄶?shù)高中生沒有機(jī)會參加過有重大意義的社會活動。同學(xué)們可以討論需要對某些事情做出改變的時候， 比如你發(fā)現(xiàn)醫(yī)療記錄經(jīng)常是手寫的， 別人很難讀懂， 你想出電子記錄的方式， 并開發(fā)了一個應(yīng)用軟件挑戰(zhàn)傳統(tǒng)的醫(yī)療體系的做法。再比如你與一個看起來像被拋棄的人成為朋友，這些都是文書的好素材。

總的來說，這個命題有助于通過你的思維過程與讀者交談。在許多情況下，對您的思維過程和決策的探索比實(shí)際的結(jié)果或概念更重要。簡而言之，這種文書非常關(guān)注“思考”，反思和調(diào)查。對于這種命題，一個很好的頭腦風(fēng)暴練習(xí)就是將你的問題寫在一張紙上，然后針對問題制定各種解決方案，包括簡短理由。你在文章中證明和解釋你的解決方案越全面，你的反應(yīng)就越有說服力。

下面這篇范文描寫了作者因?yàn)樗?dú)特的名字帶來的煩惱， 讓她覺得她必須與眾不同， 從而放棄自己的愛好做出與眾不同的選擇。最后她挑戰(zhàn)這種為不同而不同的想法， 找到自己真正的興趣。

“Whenever someone hears my name for the first time, they comment “Wow, Jensina is a cool name.” She must be pretty cool. She must be from somewhere exotic. She must be musical and artsy. When I was little, these sentiments felt more like commands than assumptions. I thought I had to be the most unique child of all time, which was a daunting task, but I tried. I was the only kid in the second grade to color the sun red. During snack time, we could choose between apple juice and grape juice. I liked apple juice more, but if everyone else was choosing apple, then I had to choose grape. This was how I lived my life, and it was exhausting.

After 8th grade, I moved to Georgia. I soon discovered that my freshman year would be my new high school’s inaugural year. Since there were students coming in from 5 different schools, there was no real sense of “normal”. I panicked. If there was no normal, how could I be unique? I realized that I had spent so much energy going against the grain that I had no idea what my true interests were. It was time to find out. I joined the basketball team, performed in the school musical, and enrolled in chorus, all of which were firsts for me. I did whatever I thought would make me happy. And it paid off. I was no longer socially awkward. In fact, because I was involved in so many unrelated activities, I was socially flexible. I had finally become my own person.”

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回答文書命題：討論引發(fā)個人成長和對自己或他人產(chǎn)生新理解的成就，事件或認(rèn)識。

Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.

回答這個命題的關(guān)鍵是清楚地描述是什么讓你成長了，然后詳細(xì)描述你的成長， 以及它與你對自己和他人的看法有何關(guān)聯(lián)。你必須花足夠的時間具體、深度描述你是如何成長的，而不是簡單地解釋你的經(jīng)歷，然后說，“我成長了“。

下面這篇范文中學(xué)生描寫了她的單身母親的健康危機(jī)如何促使她在十四歲時迅速承擔(dān)更大的責(zé)任。這篇文章描述了她所承擔(dān)的新任務(wù)，以及作者現(xiàn)在如何更加珍惜與母親共度的時光。

“I had anticipated a vacation in Washington, D.C., but unexpectedly, I was rushing to the hospital behind an ambulance carrying my mother. As a fourteen-year-old from a single mother household, without a driver’s license, and seven hours from home, I was distraught over the prospect of losing the only parent I had.

Three blood transfusions later, my mother’s condition was stable, but we were still states away from home, so I coordinated with my mother’s doctors in North Carolina to schedule the emergency operation that would save her life. My mother had been a source of strength for me, and now I would be strong for her through her long recovery ahead.

As I started high school, everyone thought the crisis was over, but it had really just started to impact my life. My mother was often fatigued, so I assumed more responsibility, juggling family duties, school, athletics, and work. I made countless trips to the neighborhood pharmacy, cooked dinner, biked to the grocery store, supported my concerned sister, and provided the loving care my mother needed to recover. I now take ownership over small decisions such as scheduling daily appointments and managing my time but also over major decisions involving my future, including the college admissions process. My mother remains a guiding force in my life, but the feeling of empowerment I discovered within myself is the ultimate form of my independence.”